I'm writing a novel - what I have is unproofed. Is anyone keen to read?
Hi
I'm writing what I think is turning out to be a pretty solid novel, but I've only had the opportunity to show it to some friends and colleagues. More importantly, I've only shown it to people who are from where I live, which I feel might make them more inclined to appreciate it for its local authenticity.
So I'd like someone out there on the internet to read my unproofed first part and plot outline. It's a sort of philosophical sci fi novel, set in South Africa. 21 pages of actual plot, and another 16 worth of plotpoints.
If I come across as a little new to this, it's because I am. What are the risks of showing it off to people I don't know, if one of you delightful forumites responds and I'm taken enough with you to show it off? 
Appreciate any input.
I'll read it only if the whole thing is told in limericks.
What PGoutis said. No one here will read your stuff. Ever. Ever ever.
Except for me. I wouldn't normally but something about philosophical sci fi novel, set in South Africa made me super curious. And 21 pages doesn't sound too bad. Send it to me posthaste.
We don't know how to read.
good luck my friend
I'm curious Duncan. Could you send it?
Except for me. I wouldn't normally but something about philosophical sci fi novel, set in South Africa made me super curious. And 21 pages doesn't sound too bad. Send it to me posthaste.
Just watch District 9.
i would be happy to read it for you. my email address is alyssaazarian@yahoo.com
This is weird, all of these members who never post wanting to read an incomplete outline randomly...
I still stand by my first post. The only safe way to get honest feedback is to join LitReactor or another workshop (real world or internet). I wouldn't trust sending my story to a bunch of people I don't know.
Why are you always trying to shatter my dreams of publishing someone else's half story as my own?
Because I want you to write your own story. With your wit, I'm sure it'll be something like a Steve Aylett story. Pretty sure that means it will wreak of awesomeness!
Toooo kind.
hey i'm soap(my pseudonym) and i'm too writing a very cool novel with a really solid storyline. like its getting really sophisticated but i sometimes get stuck bcoz there are couple of FBI related scenes. i need a reference to a website where i can learn how FBI agents investigates their suspects. And i'm telling you man , the story is mindblowing. i cannot discuss the whole story on this public forum, but i can give you the title of my story....CHARLES MORALES and THE TALLOW FACTORY....
You're not supposed to call your own stuff cool. That's like the third rule of being cool.
Rule number one: Keep your mouth shut.
Rule number two: Don't wear the band t-shirt of the band you're at the concert to see.
Try THIS.
Also, you might want to purchase The Only Grammar Book You'll Ever Need.
I bet the tallow factory is where the serial killer makes his own soap from all of the bodies he brings home.
Corollary One: if the shirt is from the band's tour of >/= 10 years prior, it is acceptable to wear.
Corollary Two: Any Motorhead t-shirt is acceptable (indeed, preferable) at any time. Lemmy don't give a fuck about being cool; Lemmy wants signs of devotion.
This is why we can't have nice things.
Rule number two: Don't wear the band t-shirt of the band you're at the concert to see.
But Wait, how else are people going to know you like the band that you paid money to see. An old tour shirt I can let slide. I am still up in the air about when people wear the shirt they purchased at the show. I know its hard to drag around a shirt all night if you plan on dancing, but seeing 100 people all wearing the same shirt is off putting.
As your attorney, my advise to you is to start drinking heavily(er).-Tuffy
That is why you buy the shirt near then end, or even after the show. Not only do you not have to carry it around or wear it, $45 dollar shirts suddenly drop in price to $15, $10... okay, how about $5? Just... what do you got in your pocket man?
Rule number two: Don't wear the band t-shirt of the band you're at the concert to see.
But Wait, how else are people going to know you like the band that you paid money to see. An old tour shirt I can let slide. I am still up in the air about when people wear the shirt they purchased at the show. I know its hard to drag around a shirt all night if you plan on dancing, but seeing 100 people all wearing the same shirt is off putting.
Hmm this makes sense, like if you're at a festival then it's cool to wear the band's shirt because there's a bunch of bands there. If you bought it at the show, that's fine too i guess.
Motörhead shirt.
This is why we can't have nice things.
So I'd like someone out there on the internet to read my unproofed first part and plot outline. It's a sort of philosophical sci fi novel, set in South Africa.
Don't change the subject!
You're going to want to take it to LitReactor.com
It's where the Writer's Workshops are. You will get tons of helpful feedback there. Here, not so much.