GIVE ME FEEDBACK PLEASE
Thu, 02/11/2010 - 22:21
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If you want real feedback or an in-depth critique, join the workshop. You'll get it in spades there.
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Thu, 02/11/2010 - 22:42
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If you want real feedback or an in-depth critique, join the workshop. You'll get it in spades there.
what he said. this is not the place for those things, nor is a blog post, or the fan submissions page, ironically. maybe that section has outlived its usefulness and should be removed.
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Thu, 02/11/2010 - 23:09
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This is really something for the Writer's Workshop.
This is not a Research Forum Post. It just looks like a story critique - and we have a whole section of the website for that.
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Nachos, every day! Dying sounds great, I don't know why people get so upset about it.
I want to know if he (or you?) gets laid. I like it, and now I'm really curious.
But if this is a true story, what sort of feedback would you like? I'd feel strange giving "feedback" on something that really happened, because it's impossible to alter the past. If that makes sense. However, if you're going to turn it into a story, I say continue with it.
Also, at one point you wrote "sew Adrianna dancing" instead of "saw."