To Be An Artist

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BenjiBean
From: Huddersfield, England
Joined: 01/13/2007
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its the first poem i have written for a long time. what do you think?

Yeah well,
You didn’t see the fire
That rose up in her eyes
I’m inspired
To become one that cannot be bought
With money

Money is a comforting insult
Economy is an upper class in joke
Punch line poor
Are not dumb any more
Educated guess can level the score

But for now there are leaders
And some turn into deceivers
That’s just human nature
So the system is out dated
Suitably ill-fated

Is technology becoming a saviour?
Is communication changing behaviour?
Altering desires
Just like a fire
That burns behind her eyes
I’m inspired

Benji Bean

corellion
Joined: 05/25/2006
User offline. Last seen 3 years 27 weeks ago.

It was brilliant, you should get it published.

P.S. Please join in my Murder Mystery game.

Mr.Shadov
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From: The Unsunny Valley
Joined: 01/07/2006
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[QUOTE=corellion;917073]It was brilliant, you should get it published.

P.S. Please join in my Murder Mystery game.[/QUOTE]
what no one want ot solve it? I could try but I'm too lazy to read first post.

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BenjiBean
From: Huddersfield, England
Joined: 01/13/2007
User offline. Last seen 6 years 4 weeks ago.

Where is it?