The Freak

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Zenit
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Back to school after being all weekend at home. Watching old movies, reading old books, following the old tradition of playing the flute. You put your hand there, you move your fingers up and down, then the melody drops and is flushed. A deep female voice asks me why I still didn't get out of there. Nothing Mom, I'm just taking a shit. Thank God they never ask where the laptop went.

You know, being the socially awkward boy is fun at home. Outside that it's another story.

I take my stuff out of the locker. Chemistry 9AM, Maths 10AM. Then a half-an-hour long break. I hate breaks, being alone and see the others in groups discussing what to do, and whom to do it -usually me or Fatass Jules- while walking up and down the yard. Start point: classroom. Then you go to the cafeteria, stop at the doors, then go somewhere else. Back to the corridors, back to the yard, back to the cafeteria. You have to move, always move, or you'll die. Like sharks, except that I don't have large teeth with which to threat the huge thugs. Stay alone for more than five minutes at the same point, the thugs will get you and invite you to visit the toilet. Upside down.

The bill rings. "You're gonna be late for Chemistry, fuckass!" I say okay, leave me alone boys. I still didn't make anything for you to treat me like that. You breathed, a deep voice whispers. You take our air all for yourself. You can't be that selfish. That's stupid, I reply. You can't tell me not to breathe. I would die.

Wrong answer.

Always bringing the wrong answer, since 1993.

"I think we'll take care of you after Maths, shithead."

That translated to my language meant another visit to the toilet, or to the corner in the end of the yard, between the empty beer cans and the smoke of the cigarettes; where you get a free punch in the face. Bam, glasses broken. Bam, black eye. Say thanks to Mr Finch for fixing your face.

Fuck you Finch.

Bam, right in the nose.

Three hours later, the school nurse twists it so the septum can heal and I don't look uglier than I already do. Broken glasses, acne face, black eye, and blood all over my pullover and jeans.

I think we'll have to call home.
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I'm bored, so I wrote this; and since I have no premium membership... I though I'd share it here.

Oh, and I can't pay the Premium membership for reasons I can't make public. I don't look for deep critique or learning from this, I just made it out of sheer boredom.

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I just wanted to say that I would make another paraghraph here:

Bam, right in the nose.

Three hours later..

Sorry, I think I tell people what I think they should or shouldn't do too often. A bad habit.

Zenit
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Yeah, I agree. Edited.

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matthew.odonnell
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Cough up your 40 bucks if you want people to read it. It won't be taken seriously here, buddy.

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Zenit
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matthew.odonnell wrote:
Cough up your 40 bucks if you want people to read it. It won't be taken seriously here, buddy.

I don't mean it to be taken seriously. Were that the case, I'd be already in the Workshop.

This was for sharing; didn't mean it to get a deep review or whatsoever. Just read, enjoy or hate that. Copy it, plagiarize it, print it, report it.

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matthew.odonnell
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Nah, I'm not gonna do any of it.

You're not supposed to post your own stories, is all I'm saying. It's clearly stated in the forum rules.

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Zenit
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Oh, right. Then my bad.

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matthew.odonnell
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Freakin' Spaniards. Geeez!

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Tuffy
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Awesome.

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matthew.odonnell wrote:
You're not supposed to post your own stories, is all I'm saying. It's clearly stated in the forum rules.

For real? How long has that been the case? I thought the purpose of this subforum was for people to post fiction that is only read by trolls.

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Giggan wrote:
How long has that been the case?

Day one.
Giggan wrote:
I thought the purpose of this subforum was for people to post fiction that is only read by trolls.

It's a good place to get flamed to tears if you post Workshop material anyway.


Fan Submissions

We accept everything from pictures of your Fight Club tattoos, to your 110 page college thesis about Choke, to a picture of you wearing a Cult shirt on TV somewhere! Original writing submissions should be submitted to our Writers Workshop.

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matthew.odonnell
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Uh oh, I feel a protest coming on.

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Giggan
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I know I wasn't hallucinating the entire time I've been at the cult and seen people posting short stories in threads. Maybe not this forum or whatevs, but yanaw'mean.

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Blags?

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Oh, stories get tossed around all over the place in appropriate threads. Kiss Ass Writing Prompt being one consistently near the top. Just not in Fan Submissions.

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ireLocus wrote:
Blags?

Yeah, people used to do (abuse) it mostly in blogs.
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