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nobodysloss
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From: Conyers, GA
Joined: 06/21/2007
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On my new blog...

It is fictional stories based on life in the golf business and will eventually have some great stories involving sex, drugs, and murder....along with golf.

[URL=http://lifeisgolf.blogspot.com/]http://lifeisgolf.blogspot.com/[/URL]

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From: At my place
Joined: 05/28/2007
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[QUOTE]The liquid fizzed down his throat, his stomach juices gurgling and popping as the liquid reached his gut producing a bubble of gas that escaped from his lips with wondrous force.[/QUOTE]

Best description of a burp ever!!!

Good stuff man. Any submissions to the workshops?

EDIT: Perhaps "Want feedback" would've worked a little better.

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From: Conyers, GA
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I've been hesitant because of my content. It's not very Chuck like and is mostly related to golf. But you would be suprised what I have seen go on at the golf course. I will probably join for a year, and submit something soon.

Thanks for the compliment on the burp...

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