"Lullaby: A Culling Song" for solo soprano and electronic accomapaniment

I apoligize. It seems the thread blew up the embedded images and scattered it all over. Here's the ledgible version of what I wrote above:

Hi there, Just joined up with this site because I have been a long time Chuck fan and also like the idea of sharing my craft with peers. I happen to be a composer of classical and electronic music and wrote a piece about a year ago for both genres.
How does this relate here? The subject matter was inspired after I read Lullaby, mostly with regard to the idea of real african culling songs.I did some musical research and ended up writing this piece for a solo soprano singer and electronics.
I would love to see what fellow Palahniuk fans think but I must warn you, this is a classical piece of music and extremely modern. It's not what we call 'tonal' necessarily and it uses electronics in a more experimental sense ala Aphex Twin or Trent Reznor. If you've never listened to a piece of modern classical music you might not like what you find right off the bat. But if you're a fan of "something different" (at least I hope you think it's different : ) ) or are just bored feel free to check out this video of the piece's premiere a year ago and let me know what it did to you.
 
Thanks for listening,
Chris

edit your first post and just put it the url of the youtube clip. it will embed itself after that and everything will be all lined up.

 If I listen to it, will it kill me?  It's just that I love the idea and I expect it to be super awesome but... I'm scared.

That may or may not have been the reason she turns around at the end. I can tell you that much.

Also for the record I did try to edit this to fix the Youtube spam but one of the frames is covering the edit button and I can't do anything about it it seems.

Sorry for the presentation...

I must say I am a huge fan of Trent Reznor, and of Aphex Twin too, but this not so much.

There isn't enough flow-through in the piece. I can see your talent in it, but to the untrained ear it's really just going to sound like you got a little too happy with your digital music creator.

At a number of points, the music doesn't compliment the vocalist, and turns around to make her sound off-key.

Towards the end of the piece it holds together a lot better.

But I am wondering.. Did you write the vocal piece seperate to the instrumental lines?

I wrote the whole piece as a cohesive whole. And I'm not going to lie and say that I wrote this trying to sound like those guys either. because other then the timbre of certain sounds and the blast of noise toward the end the style is more in the vein of experimental classical music (which is what I study mostly in my degree). So the style would be better placed in the vein of composers like John Cage or Mario Davidovsky. Also, I dont think that the subject matter I was trying to cover in the song is meant to be viewed as something pretty or nice to hear. If it's gets anything close to that it should only be a deception.

I dunno though. What we intend to create when we make aby form of art may or may not be percieved as how we meant it. I was pretty happy with how this turned out compared to what I had wanted when I set out with it to begin with.

Thanks for listening.