life's facade
Life's Façade
Nothing is unbearable. Something would be bearable, though. Entertaining. Scattered describes the room nice like. Used condoms and Mr. noodle packs. The smell of classless clean. Like the smell of a just-vacuumed hick's home, shampooed deer antlers and all. Summer rain is a welcome change to what had become a daunting killer stagnant heat. A black woman scolds her children in a harsh and endearing way. And, as the façade life goes, nobody notices, and if you make any comment, you'd be told to mind your business, to which you could reply: Mind your own because it is my business whose business I mind. Then you'd be shut down with: Treat others the way you'd like to be treated.
Not a word is spoken but there is a silent discourse between my associate and me. As he flicks the channel between CNN and FOX news to watch the coverage on a dead pedophile that no one would have suspected ’til his death when someone read his diary and told the world. A senator, this man was a Republican, and one of the unnecessary evils that plague the Earth. My associate slaps his cardac pants. A sip of Jack Daniels and I do A line of coke that has the taste of mint to it.
“So what is it today?” asks my associate.
“Give me a swig.” My associate hands me the bottle and I drink it down. “Well, there's a fire in me today, friend. Scum of the earth like this running the country! Only thing to do is go on some kind of a spree.”
“Indeed,” my associate drawls in his horse yet deep voice.
The Buick chugs up like a morning shower loogie and rips along the rain beading on the window being smacked off like cum off a cock at midnight in Las Vegas. Roll down those bloody memories like sun faded bright vivid colours. Through my mind run thoughts of getting to the casino and winning the jackpot.
“A big win is waiting down at the center there.”
I say this in telepathic to my associate whom I hate and would sell out to the police later on. Numerous trafficking charges, of course, because I have the tapes.
The casino entrance is veiled in hookers with tight red booty shorts. We wade through with slight erection do to the sluts fondling their breasts and pursing their lips. The only thing saving me from a full-blown hard-on is the thought of their green mucus filled snatches.
Inside we use magnetic devices, hand crafted by my associate to trip the slot machines and win a considerable sum, a suite, and our choice of the casino’s finest whores. I pick Mandy who boasts that she can suck a cock so good that my penis will be rendered dysfunctional for hours, but not to worry because she'll stick around and snort blow till I am ready to fuck her in a vigorous fashion, high as fuck.
“You'll like it,” she whispers in my ear, groping for my cock.
Sirens scream out at noon and Mandy has left. Hotel officials had to come up and take her out on a stretcher. I am an epileptic seizer. At least she and I had finished our business. It is Monday, so to work I stumble off after picking up a prescription of Benzos at the pharmacy.
The add agency is a grey shit-log in the toilet bowl city. I pop a Benzo and duck into the café below. I give a sheepish smile to the woman with freckles and large tits who serves the coffee. She knows the routine: By mid-week, I’ll be flirtatious, but Monday I am always blaze‘. I feel like saying something like “you have a marvellous rack miss”… I do not have the guts…
White walled office and the eyes of 12 or so smiled up cunts of men in ties and fresh suits and coffees in hand. The boss throws me a grapefruit.
“Okay Geoff, this is what we're working on.” I smile. Grapefruits. An easy vegetable to sell to the peons. I’ll give a call to my friends in the food guide department.
“I’ll make it sexy,” I say.
“Just what I like to hear, Geoff.”
“I’ll have to take some days in the field…”
“Oh of course, Geoff. I figured that much.”
“Can I hold on to this grapefruit?” I ask.
“Of course, Geoff. It's yours.”
The office all look with their envious leers and glares.
Nothing is unbearable. Work is too easy. Life is given to me, handed to me on a silver platter, if you will, this façade of a life a caring individual. BULLSHIT rules the world. Don't tell me it's love. Maybe if love was hate. Hate is love. Nothing is unbearable.
I made a TV commercials with a model and a grapefruit dancing around.
“Because it's good for you.” was at the end. Then people break dancing.
I got a raise. I am done in this void. Money is life. Life is money.
[QUOTE=alex cassun;1112712]Your writing style is horrible. I suggest you either get better or stop showing it to people.[/QUOTE]
are you really a mod?
you should not be.
you are a fucking dick.
read more.
I am seriously lol'ing.
Best thing on the Cult.
I'm a mod in name only. Really, the only powers I have are in the screenwriter's forum. But ok, I'm a dick, and no, I'm through reading your horrible writing.
[QUOTE=alex cassun;1112748]I'm a mod in name only. Really, the only powers I have are in the screenwriter's forum. But ok, I'm a dick, and no, I'm through reading your horrible writing.[/QUOTE]
that was really uncool.
i don't have the power to separate this story from your shit thread, so make a better impression next time, and remember that everything you do, everything you write is filtered through my head and becomes part of your writing. therefore, from what i know of you, i think your writing style is horrible and you should either stop showing it to people or get better. start by deleting every thread you've started, and replace them with some content that isn't total and complete trash.
[QUOTE=alex cassun;1112758]i don't have the power to separate this story from your shit thread, so make a better impression next time, and remember that everything you do, everything you write is filtered through my head and becomes part of your writing. therefore, from what i know of you, i think your writing style is horrible and you should either stop showing it to people or get better. start by deleting every thread you've started, and replace them with some content that isn't total and complete trash.[/QUOTE]
it may be trash on general, but I think to say my writing hwere is trash
i'm not even going to attempt to decipher the meaning of that post.
[QUOTE=alex cassun;1112776]i'm not even going to attempt to decipher the meaning of that post.[/QUOTE]
Yeah, um.
I tried... to no reward.
I think he's trying to confuse us.
Maybe?
I don't know.
on the genral board I writew some shit. the writing here is not shit.
your critic is TOOO harsh...
there is no such thing as too harsh. there's reality and there's bullshit. i have given you reality.
okay that story sucks then. in your eyes. but yo ucan't tell me stories you have not read suck. it isnot fair
[QUOTE=Alexanderdeath25;1112796]okay that story sucks then. in your eyes. but yo ucan't tell me stories you have not read suck. it isnot fair[/QUOTE]
HA!
Edit: Cassun, you've quickly become my favorite.
i'm a terrible person, in more ways than one.
look I am sensitive about something I wrote.
all good writers have thick skin.
You should be very acceptive of criticism. Although there is nothing wrong with fighting over something you disagree about something you wrote. Its your story and your choose to argue that POINT about the story.
Now what you should have been asking him was what exactly is horrible about it and then perhaps he may have suggested what made him want to stick his head in his own toilet of poop he recently made and forgot to flush so he could help erase the moments spent reading something to say that.
to be fair, when i get the oomph to do it, i'll write out a real critique. in the meantime i'm going to play Civ IV and then probably jerk off and eat dinner.
All at once or over a period of time separately?
[QUOTE=alex cassun;1112803]all good writers have thick skin.[/QUOTE]
Oh, this is sooooooooooo untrue.
In public maybe. But if writers had thick skin, really, most of us wouldn't be writers.
absolutely, positively... half true. if you're making your living as a writer, the self consciousness is what drives the writing, but knowing that you're a good writer keeps you doing it. in my opinion, i think.
Agreed.
And also, to our up and coming writer:
Less is more. Don't throw so much stuff up here. Refine what you have. Polish. Sharpen. Then display. Ask us questions about your work. What kind of feedback do you want? "Is it good?" "Do you like it?" These questions will not help you as a writer. positive feedback, except for the warm fuzzy feeling, rarely helps once you're out of first draft stage.
[QUOTE=Alexanderdeath25;1112554]
“Indeed,” my associate drawls in his horse yet deep voice.[/QUOTE]
Is drawling in horses even legal?
In some states.
fuck nebraska.
like everyone in the state or the ground once you are past the state line?
the whole thing.
is nebraska any good?


Your writing style is horrible. I suggest you either get better or stop showing it to people.